Question

李雷和他的同学要到圆山去春游。因为春天是爬山的最好时候。天气好，即不会太冷也不会太热。李雷和他的同学骑自行车去圆山，结果在路上，李雷拐错了弯，发生了交通事故，伤到了右腿。所以说遵守交通规则对于我们来说非常重要。 我们平时必须遵守 交通规则。 1. 注意交通灯。红灯停,绿灯行。  2.不要骑得太快，应该靠右边行。3. 骑车要小心，戴头盔。 4. 不能违反交通规则， 否则会被罚款。

提示词: make a wrong turn , happen, traffic light, helmets, break, get a fine

要求：1语言通顺，意思连贯    2. 70个词左右

We should obey the traffic rules

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Answer

How to obey the traffic rules

Li Lei and his classmates wanted to go to Mount Yuan for the spring field trip.

Because spring is the best time to climb mountains. The weather is very fine. It’s not too cold and not too hot. Li Lei and his classmates decided to go there by bike. But on the way, Li Lei made a wrong turn, and a traffic accident happened. Li Lei’s right leg was hurt.( His classmates had to send him to the hospital.) So it’s very important for us to obey the traffic rules. First, when the lights turn red, we must stop. When the lights turn green, we can cross the road. Second, we shouldn’t ride too fast and we should ride on the right of the road. Third, we should always be careful and wear bicycle helmets when we ride bikes. Fourth, if we break the traffic rules, we’ll get a fine.

【解析】这篇作文要求我们根据所给的材料，描述李雷和同学一起去爬山的经历。通过分析可知，文章中记叙爬山的事情以及路上发生的事情时，因为是已经发生过的，故应使用一般过去时态，注意动词的形式变化，尤其是不规则动词的过去式形式。从这件事上得到的教训应使用一般现在时态。写作的时候，要注意英语表达跟汉语的不同，使用一些词汇、短语和句型，从整体考虑。句子之间使用一些连词，或者使用一些从句，如时间状语从句或条件状语从句等，增强文章的表现力。

点睛：这是一篇优秀的作文，短文作者根据题目要求记叙了李雷和同学在去爬山的路上发生的一次事故，告诉我们怎样遵守交通规则。首先短文内容完整，包含了题目要求的所有信息，没有遗漏要点；其次短文使用了正确的时态，开头和介绍如何遵守交通规则这两个部分用了一般现在时态；记叙这次事故用了一般过去时态。动词的形式变化准确，合乎语法规范；最后短文里使用了比较丰富的句型，如Li Lei and his classmates decided to go there by bike. But on the way, Li Lei made a wrong turn, and a traffic accident happened、So it’s very important for us to obey the traffic rules、Second, we shouldn’t ride too fast and we should ride on the right of the road、if we break the traffic rules, we’ll get a fine等。