Question

假定你是李华，得知你班英国交换生Jenny最近因学习压力大而情绪低落。请给她写一封 电子邮件，内容包括：

1.表示关心；

2.提出缓解、释放压力的建议。

注意：

1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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Answer

Dear Jenny,

I’m worried to learn that you are depressed because of the great pressure of recent study. Here are some tips for you to relieve it.

First of all, shift your focus. Paying too much attention to your grades will make you more nervous. You should think about the progress you’ve made and build your self-confidence. Secondly, take some exercise. A saying goes that all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. Do some sports, and you'll feel relaxed all over. Last but not least, sleep well. Getting a good night's sleep, you'll be recharged and start over easily.

I hope my advice will be helpful to you.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一封电子邮件给最近因学习压力大而情绪低落的英国交换生Jenny，关心她并给予意见。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时

结构：总分法

  总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 表示关心；

2. 提出缓解、释放压力的建议。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

because of；pay attention to；make progress；build one’s self-confidence；be helpful to

第三步：连词成句

1. I’m worried to learn that you are depressed because of the great pressure of recent study.

2. Paying too much attention to your grades will make you more nervous.

3. You should think about the progress you’ve made and build your self-confidence.

4. I hope my advice will be helpful to you.

(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,

6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表选择：either…or…，or

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改