Question

假定你是李华, 收到笔友Ben的如下邮件,请按括号内的内容提要给予回复。

Dear Li Hua,

Guess what? My boss has asked me to make a short film for visitors to your town. (Great) I’ll be in charge of a film team of four so it’ll be an interesting experience for me. We could come for one week either in July or August. When do you think would be better?(Say when and why)

In the film we’d like to show a place that’s a bit unusual. Is there somewhere interesting that tourists don’t normally visit? (Tell Ben)  Finally, we’ll need someone to show us around the town. Do you know someone who might be able to help us? (offer to help)

Please write back soon.

Ben

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

3. 开头和结尾已为你写好。

Dear Ben,

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Best wishes for you!

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer

Dear Ben,

It’s great that you’re making a short film about my town, a worldwide tourist destination known for its special sights all the year round. Now I’d like to offer more details in response to your questions.

You could come here in August, with few rainy days and stable temperatures, ideal weather conditions required for your wok. Besides, it’s the best time to visit the Green Valley, whose unusual beauty was discovered just recently because of its inaccessibility and yet worth showing in your film. To reach the place, you need a local guide to guarantee safety. But for other sites in the town, I’d like to show you around them, so that you can save some time and finish your filmmaking as scheduled.

Hopefully, your trip to my town will be rewarded with great success!

【解析】

这篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封回信。

第一步：要审题，审题的目的是获取重要信息。通过Ben的来信，我们要确定几个要回复的信息。第一、1，来家乡拍摄的时间并说明理由。 2，推荐拍摄的地点并说明理由。3，需要一名当地导游做向导，自己也可以帮忙。时态为一般现在时。第二、人称以第二人称为主。一三人称兼有。

第二步：布局段落，确定主要段落，次要段落，段落数量。这篇写作段落是三段，第一段主要是引题，第二段主要写回复的主要内容：1，来家乡拍电影的时间并说明理由。2，推荐拍电影的地点并说明理由。3，需要一名本地导游做向导，自己也可以帮忙。第三段表达期望。其中第二段为重点段落。

第三步：确定关键词汇和短语：making a short film about my town , few rainy days and stable temperatures, Green Valley, inaccessibility, local guide, guarantee safety，worldwide tourist destination.

第四步：确定较为高级的句子It’s great that...；It’s the best time to visit the Green Valley, whose unusual beauty was discovered just recently because of its inaccessibility and yet worth showing in your film. so that you can save some time and finish your filmmaking as scheduled.

第五步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连接词进行过渡衔接: Now , Besides, But for, Hopefully.

第六步：注意书写，保持卷面整洁，避免划线，乱擦。

【亮点说明】

文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式如:It’s great that...；It’s the best time to visit the Green Valley, whose unusual beauty was discovered just recently because of its inaccessibility and yet worth showing in your film. so that you can save some time and finish your film making as scheduled.高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次。整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。