Question

假定你是某国际学校的学生李华，你校即将开展“绿色校园”活动，现在向学生公开征集活动方案。请你向负责该活动的老师Smith先生写信，提出你的建议和想法。要点如下：

1.活动形式及内容；

2.注意事项；

3.其它。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Smith,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer

Dear Smith,

I’m Li Hua, a senior student of this school. I’m writing to offer my proposal concerning the “Green Campus” activity to be carried out in our school.

In my humble opinion, to create a green campus, what we need to do is not only to plant more trees and flowers to beautify the environment, but also to create an energy-efficient and resource-cycled campus. Everyone on campus should be informed to form the habit of using resources properly and saving energy. It would be better to organize some speech contests or knowledge competitions related to environmental protection to arouse students’ awareness of keeping the campus green, because it needs our joint efforts to realize this goal. And we can achieve it by doing pieces of small acts in daily life, such as turning off the light when leaving the classroom and take the initiative to pick up the waste paper on the ground.

I hope you will find these suggestions useful, and I would be ready to discuss further details with you if necessary.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封信。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封电子邮件；假定你是某国际学校的学生李华，你校即将开展“绿色校园”活动，现在向学生公开征集活动方案。请你向负责该活动的老师Smith先生写信，提出你的建议和想法，时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：offer my proposal concerning（提出关于…的提议），In my humble opinion（以我个人拙见），informed to（通知），form the habit of（形成习惯）arouse students’ awareness of（唤醒学生们的意识）等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

本文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。

【亮点说明】

范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如：主语从句what we need to do is not only to plant more trees and flowers to beautify the environment, but also to create an energy-efficient and resource-cycled campus.；非谓语动词的运用I’m writing to offer my proposal concerning the “Green Campus” activity to be carried out in our school.全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。