Question

假如你是高中生李明，你发现你的同学在宿舍抽烟。你认为吸烟是不好的习惯，尤其是中学生。你写信给校长，建议在全校开展戒烟活动，还给学生一个清新的校园。书信包括表中所列内容。

词数：100~120

吸烟的危害	戒烟的措施
1.污染空气，危害健康	1.禁止在校园吸烟
2.招致厌烦，影响关系	2.老师也应戒烟，为学生树立榜样
3.费用过高，浪费金钱	3.严格要求
4.浪费时间，影响学习

Dear headmaster,

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Yours,

Li Ming

Answer

Dear headmaster,

Recently I’ve found that some of my roommates smoke in the dormitory. The air in the room is always made very dirty. I suggest that we should forbid smoking in our school, as smoking causes many problems. First, smoking pollutes our fresh air and even leads to serious diseases. Secondly, smoking can invite being bored, affecting friendship between classmates. Next, it’s a great waste of money buying cigarettes .Finally, it will take a lot of time to smoke, which, of course, affects our studies greatly.

I insist that our school take strict measures to forbid smoking in our school. Our teachers should give up smoking, too, setting a good example to us. No one should break the rule.

Yours,

Li Ming

【解析】试题分析：本文是一封写给校长的信，建议在全校开展戒烟活动，还给学生一个清新的校园。本文是提纲式作文，书信内容已经给出。写作时注意时态、语态的合理运用，主次分明，详略得当，语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

【亮点说明】

本文是一篇书信，格式正确，内容符合要求，语句衔接紧密，文中使用高级句子。I’ve found that some of my roommates smoke in the dormitory.ｔｈａｔ引导宾语从句；I suggest that we should forbid smoking in our school, as smoking causes many problems. Suggest做“建议”讲，后面的宾语从句用虚拟语气，同时句中使用ａｓ引导的原因状语从句；smoking can invite being bored, affecting friendship between classmates现在分词做自然的结果状语；it will take a lot of time to smoke, which, of course, affects our studies greatly.ｗｈｉｃｈ引导非限制性定语从句；I insist that our school take strict measures to forbid smoking in our school.ｉｎｓｉｓｔ后面宾语从句的虚拟用法；另外，Recently，First, Secondly, too, setting a good example to等的运用为文章增色添彩。