Question

假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下短文。短文中共有10处错误，每句中最多有两处。错误涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。

增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（∧），并在此符号下面写出该加的词。

删除：把多余的词用斜线（＼）划掉。

修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。

注意：1.每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；

  2.只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。

I hardly remember my grandmother.She used to holding me on her knees and sing old songs.I was only four when she passes away.She is just a distant memory for me now.I remember my grandfather very much.He was tall, with broad shoulder and a beard that turned from black toward gray over the years.He had a deep voice,which set himself apart from others in our small town,he was strong and powerful.In a fact,he even scared my classmates away during they came over to play or do homework with me.However,he was the gentlest man I have never known.

Answer

I hardly remember my grandmother.She used to holding me on her knees and sing old songs.I was only four

hold

when she passes away.She is just a distant memory for me now.I remember my grandfather very much.He was tall,

passed well

with broad shoulder and a beard that∧turned from black toward gray over the years.He had a deep voice,which set

shoulders had

himself apart from others in our small town,∧he was strong and powerful.In a fact,he even scared my classmates away had 去掉a

him during they came over to play or do homework with me.However,he was the gentlest man I have never known.

when ever

【解析】句意为“我几乎不记得我的祖母。她过去常常抱着我跪在地上，唱老歌。”考查固定搭配，used to do sth ,过去常常做某事，故将holding改为hold。

句意为“我只有四岁时，她去世了。”外婆去世这件事发生在过去，所以应该用过去式，故将passes改为passed。

句意为“我非常深的记得我的祖父。”very much 可以修饰许多动词,但就是不能修饰remember.remember 只能被well/clearly修饰,表达“记得很深/好.”故将much改为well。

句意为“他个子很高，肩膀宽阔”，根据常理，人有两个肩膀，肩膀应该是复数，所以应该用复数形式，故将 shoulder改为 shoulders 。

And后的句子 a beard that turned from black toward gray over the years.缺少谓语，句意为祖父有多年从黑色变成了灰色的胡子，时态应该与前文保持一致，用过去时，故在此处加上had。

句意：他的深沉的声音把他和别人区别开来。所以应该用宾格him。故将himself改为him。

根据句中结构可知He had a deep voice…和he was strong and powerful是并列关系，故用and连接。

实际上，固定短语应该为in fact ,故删去a。

during为介词，后不能接句子；应用when这个连词引导时间状语从句。故将during改为when。

语义错误。根据句意：他是我认识的最温柔的人。故将将never改为ever。

【名师点睛】：

During 和when 的区别：

during为介词，后面接名词：I went to visit the Great Wall during the summer vacation.我暑假里去游览了长城；
when意为“当…”，引导时间状语从句。when强调时间点，通常译为“当…”，例如：When she came in, I was cooking. 她进来时，我正在做饭。

例如本文第9题：he even scared my classmates away him during they came over to play or do homework with me。during是介词，后面不能是一个句子，应该用when引导时间状语从句。故将during改为when.