Question

假如你是红星中学的李津，你的美国朋友Peter来信表示，希望了解你校学生课外活动情况，请你用英语写一封回信，介绍你校学生课外活动．

☆学校为了丰富学生的课外生活开设了一些俱乐部，如读书、写作、篮球、音乐等；

☆课外活动的时间安排：每天下午一个小时；

☆课外活动对学生的益处：如增强体质，丰富知识等；

☆你加入了一个俱乐部，说明你加入的理由．

注意：

（1）词数不少于100词；

（2）可适当增加细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯；

（3）开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．

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Li Jin．

Answer

Dear Peter，

I'm glad to hear from you．I would like to tell you something about after-school activities in our school，Hongxing High School．

For one thing，in order to enrich students'life，after-school activities in our school are varied and colorful．Different kinds of clubs are set up，such as reading，basketball，writing and singing． For another，these clubs are open for students for one hour every day． By participating in after-school activities，not only can we build our body and enrich our knowledge，but also we can free us from the heavy load of study． I joined the basketball club because I like basketball very much and I have learned how to be a good player and how to do teamwork．

In a word，I really enjoy the after-school activities．（做出总结）

Best wishes．

【解析】 本篇文章是提纲式作文，一篇书信应用文。要求作者根据美国朋友Peter的来信，向他介绍你校学生的课外活动情况，用英语写一封回信来介绍你校的学生课外活动。

内容包括：1）学校为了丰富学生的课外生活开设了一些俱乐部，如读书、写作、篮球、音乐等；For one thing，in order to enrich students'life，after-school activities in our school are varied and colorful．Different kinds of clubs are set up，such as reading，basketball，writing and singing．

2）课外活动的时间安排：每天下午一个小时；these clubs are open for students for one hour every day．

3）课外活动对学生的益处：如增强体质，丰富知识等；By participating in after-school activities，not only can we build our body and enrich our knowledge，but also we can free us from the heavy load of study．

4）你加入了一个俱乐部，说明你加入的理由。I joined the basketball club because I like basketball very much and I have learned how to be a good player and how to do teamwork．

5）总结。In a word，I really enjoy the after-school activities．

亮点：本作文内容要点齐全，使用了一些顺序词，使文章条理清晰，语言流畅。使用了多种句式结构，让文章更加生动。使用了被动语态和非谓语，提高了文章的档次。

复杂句：I joined the basketball club because I like basketball very much and I have learned how to be a good player and how to do teamwork．

并列句：By participating in after-school activities，not only can we build our body and enrich our knowledge，but also we can free us from the heavy load of study．

状语从句：I joined the basketball club because I like basketball very much

非谓语形式：By participating in after-school activities，….

使用了被动语态：after-school activities in our school are varied and colorful．Different kinds of clubs are set up，such as reading，basketball，writing and singing．

【名师点睛】高中英语提纲式作文写作技巧

听、说、读、写既是学习英语的四种基本手段也是英语学习者的四项基本技能，其中写作是最为关键的输出部分，并且在高中英语教学中越来越受到重视。高考中提纲式作文非常常见，下面是写提纲式作文的一点技巧。

1、审题：审题是做到切题的第一步。所谓审题就是要看清题意，确定文章的中心思想、主题，并围绕中心思想组织材料。

2、进行构思，列出简单的提纲，打造文章之骨架：审好题、立好意后，就要写提纲，打造文章的骨架。文章布局要做好几件事：安排好层次段落，铺设好过渡，处理好开头和结尾。

3、扩展成文：根据字数多少扩展成篇。扩展的内容一定要紧扣主题，千万不要写那些与主题不相关的内容。

扩展成文时还需注意以下方面：

1)确保提纲中段落结构的思路与各段主题句的一致性。只有这样，才能保证所写段落不偏题、不跑题。

2)避免只是用一两个句式或重复用同一词语。要灵活运用各种句式，如倒装句、强调句、省略句、主从复合句、对比句、分词短语、介词短语等，从而增加文章的可读性。注意使用高级框架结构的句子，让文章的结构错落有致。

3)用好连接词，注意段落间、句子间的连贯性。要做到所写文章层次分明，思路清晰，文字连贯，就需要在句与句之间、段与段之间架起一座座桥梁使文章连贯通顺，让前后表达浑然一体。