Question

随着经济的发展，越来越多的家庭拥有小汽车，因此，放学时，家长接学生的车辆总会导致校门口的交通过度拥挤，学校对此非常苦恼。假如你是高三年级的学生李津，请给张校长写一封信，分析一下该现象产生的原因以及潜在的危险，并提出你的建议：

1.鼓励同学们坐公交车或者选择共享单车上学；环保便捷；

2.提醒家长有序停车；

3.各年级可以分时间放学。

注意：词数100左右；开头已给出，不计入词数。（共享单车Bicycle-sharing）

Mr. Zhang,

I’m writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our gate.

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Yours,

Li Jin

Answer

Mr. Zhang,

I’m writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our school gate.

With the development of economy, more and more families begin to have cars of their own, which contributes partly to the problem. Besides, some parents always try to park their cars as close as possible to the school gate, without taking anything else into consideration.

In order to solve it, I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken. First, I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike. Second, if they have to be picked up by their parents by car, they’d better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places. Finally, it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times.

I hope my suggestions will be useful to help solve the problem.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Jin

【解析】这是一篇书信类作文。同学们在写这篇文章时，

要注意以下几点：

1. 是让学生分析一下上面的现象产生的原因以及潜在的危险，所以通篇的主要时态以一般现在时态最好。

2. 文章的要点也基本上都给出来了：1.鼓励同学们坐公交车或者选择共享单车上学；环保便捷；2.提醒家长有序停车；3.各年级可以分时间放学。考生要把要点全交代，并结合自己的生活经验把这些建议写具体。

3.要拓展内容，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。

【范文亮点】

1.一些高级短语和连接词的使用如： taking anything else into consideration. First，second， Besides

2.With the development of economy, more and more families begin to have cars of their own, which contributes partly to the problem. which引导的非限制性定语从句。

I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken. that引导的同位语从句

3.if they have to be picked up by their parents by car, they’d better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places. if引导的条件状语从句

4.it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times. It作形式主语，真正的主语是to make students of different grades leave school at different times.