Question

假如你是李华，你的好友李娜要邀你一起去西藏旅行，但你得陪同父母去看望在乡下的爷爷奶奶，所以不能去。请以电子邮件的形式给你的朋友提一下旅行建议。1.加入旅行社，同时结伴而行；2.早晚气温较低，带上轻薄的棉衣; 3.日照时间长，带上太阳镜，遮阳帽等物品；4.空气稀薄，戴上吸氧用具。(西藏Tibet   旅行社 travel agency   吸氧用具 Oxygen inhalation apparatus)

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Answer

Dear Li Na,

I feel sorry that I can’t go to travel to Tibet with you. In the holiday of May First, I need to go with my parents to visit my grandparents who live in the countryside.

As your best friend, I’d like to give you some advice about the Tibet journey. First of all, You’d better join a travel agency and travel with others. What’s more, don’t forget to take a light warm overcoat with you ,because the temperature in the morning and at night is too low in Tibet. In Addition, you should wear sunglasses or caps against the sun when you’re out of doors because of the long sunlight time. Most importantly, the air is thin and the air pressure is low, therefore, you should take an oxygen inhalation apparatus.

Anyway, I sincerely hope you can have a good time traveling to Tibet.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文，文章要点已经给出，在写这篇文章时要注意以下几点：

1.整篇文章时态以一般现在时为主。

2.要点要齐全，但是不要进行简单的罗列，可以采用适当的连接词，或者是表递进关系的副词如What’s worse、 Most importantly、First of all、Anyway，使上下文衔接自然，行文自然流畅。

3.此作最好用简单句与复合句结合的方法写作如 I need to go with my parents to visit my grandparents who live in the countryside。

4.多采用一些高级句型，如You’d better join a travel agency and travel with others等，同时使用一些词组如because of，have a good time等。

【范文亮点】

提纲性文章难点：扩充成句，因为提纲性文章主题内容已经基本列出，在将短句扩充时，要精炼。其中要注意尽量用高级词汇和复杂句是来表达，如强调句，定语从句等，就如文中 I need to go with my parents to visit my grandparents who live in the countryside。文章用What’s worse、 Most importantly、First of all这些连接词，层层递进，条理清晰，讲出了对于作文主题的建议。最后用Anyway总结，首尾呼应，文章结构紧凑，再者就是要多使用一些高级词汇与词组，如文中because of，have a good time等。最后就是段落清新，层次分明。