Question

来自美国的小迈克看完了这篇报道后深受感动，他觉得不仅是中国人应该向雷锋学习而且如果全世界的人都能做到这样，世界就会更美好。下面请你帮小迈克完成这篇发出号召的讲演稿。

内容包括：

1.简单介绍雷锋的事迹；

2.提出学习雷锋的具体行动建议(至少三条)；

3.呼吁大家都来学习雷锋。

作文要求：

1.不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现学校真实的名称和学生的真实姓名；

2.语句连贯，词数80个左右。作文的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数，也不必抄写在答题卷上。

Good morning, my dear teachers and students!

That’s all for my speech! Thank you for listening.

Answer

Good morning, my dear teachers and students!

I feel so glad to talk about a Chinese model soldier named Lei Feng.

On December 18, 1940, Lei Feng was born in a poor peasant family in a small village which lies in Hunan Province. Lei he joined the Communist Party in 1960. He loved the Party and the people. What’s more, he was selfless, hardworking and always did good for others. As a result, he became a model soldier one year later. It’s a great pity that Lei died in an accident in 1962. What a great example Lei Feng is !

I think people from the whole world should learn from Lei Feng.To learn from Lei Feng, we can do what we can to help people in need and raise money for the poor. What’s more, we can do much voluntary work to make our city more beautiful. As students,we should help to clean the teachers’ offices, study hard and help each other with study. Hopefully, Living Lei Feng will live all over the world.

That’s all for my speech! Thank you for listening.

【解析】这篇作文要求我们以Mike的身份，写一篇演讲稿。内容主要有以下几个方面：首先介绍雷锋的先进事迹，这一部分注意应使用一般过去时态，动词应变成过去式形式，尤其需要注意不规则动词过去式的变化；然后呼吁大家都来向雷锋学习，并提出具体的行动建议。这一部分就可以使用一般现在时态。学生应根据这个提纲，组织语言，丰富作文的内容，使它充实、完整。写作时，要注意英语表达和汉语习惯的不同，不能逐词翻译，写汉语式的英语，应从句子的整体考虑，使用恰当的词汇、短语和句型，连贯成句。句与句之间要有合理的过渡语句，这样可以使整篇文章意思连贯。

点睛：这是一篇优秀的作文。首先这篇短文内容完整，充实，涵盖了题目要求的所有要点。在叙述雷锋的事迹之前，作者先用一句话引出短文的主题，I feel so glad to talk about a Chinese model soldier named Lei Feng；接下来比较长的篇幅介绍了雷锋的生平事迹；然后呼吁人们向雷锋学习，并提出了具体的建议。其次短文使用了正确的时态，第二段的内容以一般过去时态为主，第三段以一般现在时态为主。动词形式使用准确，语法规范。最后短文中使用较丰富的句型，如On December 18, 1940, Lei Feng was born in a poor peasant family in a small village which lies in Hunan Province中定语从句、What’s more, he was selfless, hardworking and always did good for others. As a result, he became a model soldier one year later.中过渡性词语What’s more, As a result、What a great example Lei Feng is !感叹句、To learn from Lei Feng, we can do what we can to help people in need and raise money for the poor.非谓语动词、宾语从句等等。