Question

短文写作。

假设你是李雷,昨天你参与了学校值日。请写一封信向校长汇报你值日时的所见所闻，并提出改进建议。要点如下：

值日见闻	1、校园不整洁，有学生乱扔垃圾，乱涂乱画，摘花，踩草坪； 2、有学生吃垃圾食品，课后大声喧哗，互相打闹，离开教室时忘记关灯； 3、考生自拟1-2点校园不文明行为。
建   议	考生自拟至少两点。

要求：1、可以适当发挥，信中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；

      2、语言通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚，书写规范；

      3、词数：80词左右。书信的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Headmaster,

   I was on duty yesterday.                                                

                                                                                                                               Sincerely,

                                                              Li Lei

Answer

One possible version：

Dear Headmaster,

I was on duty yesterday. Now I'm writing to tell you that the school was untidy. Some students threw rubbish everywhere. Some students drew on the wall. I also found that some girls walked on the grass and picked flowers. During break time many students ate too much junk food. Many boys spoke quite loudly and fought with each other. After school, some students forgot to turn off the lights when leaving the classroom. What's more, a few students even rode their bicycles on the playground. I think we should make rules to change the situation and care about the environment, then our school will become more beautiful.

Sincerely,

Li Lei

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，李雷写自己的值日见闻以及建议。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时和一般过去时，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：I also found that....，Many boys spoke quite loudly and...，some students forgot to ...，I think we should...，等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系.

写作亮点：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头介绍了我昨天值日，要告诉大家值日情况，接下来介绍值日见闻，最后提出自己的建议，要制定规定改善情况，关心环境。此处write to,on the wall, too much, fight with,forget to do sth, turn off, what’s more,care about等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。

考点：提纲作文。